This was beautiful. I enjoyed reading every single word.
The overall theme of the poem is honestly unique and you presented it to us with remarkable detail. This poem is evoking--it creates vivid emotions and images in one's mind.
What really impressed me was your choice of words. Original and advanced, the vocabulary you have used has built such an awe-worthy piece.
I was...captivated, if you will and if there is such word by your rhyming. Even though missing in some lines, it dominates some others, thus being fully balanced.
All in all, this piece is astounding! You really got talent there!