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Hello! I'm here on behalf of :iconthe-writers-study:. You submitted this to the critique folder so I'm here to give you the critique.

To begin with, the thing that makes this poem really impressiove is how it manages to pass a message across and bring out a lot of emotions to the reader within a few lines.
I like the idea of LOVE. Each letter of every line creates the word, truly impressive, indeed. The adjective 'veiled' really fascinated because it passed the image of veiled, covered eyes to my mind,

Thare's only one thing I'd like to point out. You've used the word 'beauty' twice in just four lines, repeating yourself. It just doesn't sound right.

Other than that, you did a wonderful job.
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